I am a Year 5 student at Halsey Drive School. I hope you enjoy looking at my blog.
I think I did well on advertising a golden retriever but I need to improve on making my adjectives a bit more interesting.
I agree Siya. Someone of your skill in writing can add a lot more detail and interest to your poem. Perhaps think about writing this advertisement as a piece of persuasive writing, rather than a poem. Advertisements are trying to get you to do something after all, which is buy a product.