Wednesday, 22 March 2017

W.A.L.T:Describe a setting




WALT - Describe a Setting

Can you describe the Mountain Pass? Try to use your senses to describe (what you can see, hear, smell, taste and feel). You might also try to describe how you might be feeling, such as tense, afraid, alone. Include descriptive language features such as similes, metaphors, personification and alliteration.

The trees swayed gently as I walked up the first stair. A shiver ran down my spine as the wind howled. All that was left of the trees were  their silhouettes. The sound of my boots softly padding across the snow made  me feel like I was  walking on ice cream. “Hoot,Hoot” the owl screamed as the tree collapsed on top of it, it missed the owl by a feather. The rocky walls closed in trapping me, making me shiver with fear. The only way out was to climb the cliffs.


 All of a sudden there was a pack of wolves standing hungrily in front of me. I freaked out, wondering what should I do? I jumped off the cliff, it was only a short way down. I had a sprained ankle but I ran as fast as I could, which was not very fast because I was limping. I was hoping that the wolves weren’t  running behind me. I didn’t dare to turn around. Finally I made it into safety but I had to get to a hospital.
“Naaeeh’ , a horse shouted in delight as it’s voice echoed throughout the cliffs, I turned around and saw a beautiful paddock gazing at  me like a chocolate bar. I was in shock that such a horrible place led to such an amazing place with beautiful horses.

1 comment:

  1. "All that was left of the trees were their silhouettes" is a fabulous way to infer that it is dark - Ka pai. Some of your writing is starting to drift off into narrative territory rather than concentrating on describing the setting.

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